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by ~anaesthesia

That’s who you are and this is who I am
Perhaps jaded and mostly unsure
Unsatisfied with life
Yet happy to be the martyr

Though you are full of goodness and light
To the point were it is almost blinding
You are a bottle full of good intentions
Brimming with ambitions and need

The need for one
The need for some
The need to care for wounded souls

What a gift it must be to be able to see things
For how they really are
To know that helping others is more then just
common courtesy

Would it kill me to smile?
Yes, it would
Would it kill me to help?
It just might

Yet a blind eye like mine can see in you all the things I will never see in me
I can see the shadows mixed in with the light
Though right now I am a little bit beyond words
Far past you and I
I am sitting in silence, appreciating it for what it is

I can see spans of time before me
Moments when pain like this doesn’t matter
When people just stop and take the time to

Care

This profound vision was brought on by
Your words
Your faith
Your light

If only you could see this purity of mind that I see before me
If only I could be a mirror of a good friend

But you can’t see in yourself what I see
Therefore I will sit and wait and wonder
I will ask why and risk taking action on my thoughts
Regardless of this all, it’s times like these
That are never a waste of time.
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okay kids first things first.
this is my first thing EVER to not have a title peice of art to go with the "poem". And the reason for this is because for once I want you to really notice what I am saying. I want you to view this for better knowledge of where I am in life right now and I don't want to gloss things over. I will also revise this peice so please for the love of god, critique critique critique, and comments are great as well. I am sure that for the first time in a long time I have a train of thought and this train is headed to a series of these poems that might become some little short story or an essay of sorts.

I am very excited to be posting this, I wish you all to find the same peace of mind I have found tonight.

-Thesia
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:iconfireflycatcher:
very straight forward, simple and pure
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:iconanaesthesia:
Coming from you, that is an extreme compliment. Thank you.
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:iconfireflycatcher:
by the way... i love your hanging words... the ones that stick out on lines all their own... it gives them extra oomph... i like that
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:iconanaesthesia:
I am glad someone else see those words for what they are.
Added oomph, breaks in my train of thought, words from the core of my mind.
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:iconf0rtylegz:
Honest... straight from the heart.

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:iconanaesthesia:
Thank you, raw honesty is what I was shooting for. I am glad it came across that way. :D
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:iconsnyder:
~snyder Aug 7, 2004  Hobbyist Artist
Beatufil. Frighteningly close to my situation. Really.

I really love it.

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-='Snyder'=-
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